Paper 2
Why?
Can you imagine some teenagers that you knew or not rob a store or a bank because their parents say that they can't get a job? Can you imagine teenagers doing something that drastic just to get that paper? Why let our children and or friends go that far just to relay a message to the parents? What is up with these parents not letting their teenagers work? What happened to "letting them go off to make their own mistakes and then letting them learn by it"? And if the parents does decide to let their teenagers work, what a big, awful, terrible mistake you our making. I mean I do understand school now, get a degree, and then get a "career" later, but I don’t think that parents really understand that when a teenager has a job, he or she wouldn’t be asking for money all the time. The parents wouldn’t be dishing out so much money every week. Honestly, I don’t get it? The parents are always telling their kids to stop complaining, but parents complain when their teenagers are asking for money. Why not let them work? Think of all the reasons why teenagers without a job would go to their parents for money. Wouldn’t you think that if he or she did work he or she wouldn’t be asking for money and that means more money that his or her parents can splurge on themselves or can go towards bills. If parents would let their teenagers work, I believe that he or she would become independent and not depending on his or her parents to get what they need. Having a job at an early age would help the child to mature enough, so that when it comes time for them to get into the "real" world they wouldn’t be having so much trouble with financing and et cetera. Also, they wouldn't be resorting to crime.
For example, I am a seventeen-year-old college student and I haven’t had a job in all my life. My parents believe that if I keep my head in school and the school books, I would get a career that is better paying and worth the time rather then these positions at McDonalds, Burger King, and et cetera. They also believe that school comes first and that a job can come later. For this issue, I had interviewed my fifteen-year-old brother and got his perspective on his parents deciding that he needs to worry about school and not a job:
Me: How old are you?
Gregg: Fifteen years old.
Me: Do you go to school? Do you work?
Gregg: Yes, I go to school and no I don't work.
Me: If so, where and how much do you get paid? If not, why don't you work?
Gregg: My parents want me to have a career not a position.
Me: Do you believe that your parents don't want you to work? Why?
Gregg: I believe that my parents don't want me to work because they say I need a career not a job.
Me: Do you believe that your parents think that since you go to school, you don't have the time for work?
Gregg: My parents believe that education is the most important and it comes first. I do not have time for work.
Me: What do you think is actually the reasons for your parents not letting you work? Do you think that the reason is because they want you to keep your head into school or because they think you are not ready?
Gregg: I believe that my parents think that I can't follow directions so, if I can't follow directions I can't get a job.
Me: Do you want to work and if so, what is your reason for working?
Gregg: Yes, I want to work because I am so tried of asking my parents for money. I would what to go out somewhere and would not have to ask my parents for nothing. Besides, asking for money from my parents is like filling out a 10-paged essay on why I need the money or what are you going to use it for? It is just too many questions just to ask for money.
This interview with my brother Gregg has just clarified what I was just writing about. It is too much of a hassle to ask for money for going out with some friends or for school stuff. On the part were my brother told me that "my parents think that I can't follow directions so, if I can't follow directions I can't get a job" I believe that a job could help my brother follow directions. I believe if he doesn’t want to get fired or doesn’t want to prove our parents right, he would follow directions. Besides, does parents know that when your child becomes a teenager, he or she can multitask. We can figure out a way to balance out school full-time and work part-time.
I can’t believe this…
Here is an interesting blog post on how this eighteen-year-old boy’s father wishes that there were anti-finery laws for teenagers. I think this is hilarious! Here is the link http://blogs.law.harvard.edu/philg/2006/10/01/anti-finery-laws-for-teenagers/. To me, it sounds like this parent is jealous of his son for driving this brand-new Mercedes. I think because of the father’s jealousy he wanted teenagers to have this anti-finery law because he feels that he doesn’t match up with his son. I guess he expected for him to be up there in the economic stature then his son. I guess he feels as though teenagers shouldn’t be allowed to have jobs like that because if so, it makes everybody else that had worked longer and harder to get that kind of money look bad. I would be pretty mad if my son or daughter was making a whole lot of money then I was in my lifetime. But look at the bright side, at least that child is not asking you for money. It makes life so much easier. Here is another blog post on how Sarah’s parents let her work and the benefits of having a job. Here is the link http://zalena.livejournal.com/443266.html. This blog talks about something at first, but talks about when her mother was out of work when she was in college and helping her mother out with the bills. I think parents believe that if their teenager has a job he or she would be selfish and wouldn’t help out. With me personally, I wouldn’t even dream of doing that. If my parents were in need of money or anything else, I would do my best into helping them in anyway I could. In another blog post http://allaboutlavender.blogspot.com/2006/07/teenagers-each-work-in-progress.html, this talks about how this company called All About Lavender likes the idea of hiring teenagers to gather lavender from their fields.
"As a community member we're committed to this hiring of teenagers even
though it makes little sense in terms of business. We consider it a long term
investment in our community and in each of the kids we're able to employ.
These work opportunities help kids build confidence and self esteem. They learn
responsibility and work ethic. They learn how to work together with others
outside of their usual circle of friends. They learn that a little hard work won't
kill them - even though there are a few teenagers who might like to argue that
point."
I agree with this person (it doesn’t give a name on who is the owner or who is saying this). Giving teenagers a chance to work would give them an experience that he or she wouldn’t forget. Because of that first job, it could help him or her look at the world in a different view and learn responsibility and how to coexist with others. I’m am glad that someone is looking at this from my point of view. I been trying for years to convince my parents to let me work because it can teach me responsibility and loyalty, but my parents keep on assisting that I need to concentrate on school.
Who cares what they think…?
In this next article that I actually got from CNN talks about basically what a parents would think about before letting their teenagers go into the work world. Here is the link http://web.jjay.cuny.edu/~awinson/teens-working.htm. I understand that parents only see the negative things that could happen if the child gets a job, such as the poor grades and the higher alcohol consumption. But I feel as though teenagers should be allowed to work and also balance out the load of school. I mean yea some teenagers work and don’t have time for schoolwork, but don’t label all teenagers to what others don’t do. Just because some lack off on schoolwork because of their job doesn’t mean that all teenagers would do the same. There are some teenagers out in the world that actually are mature enough to say to their boss that I can’t work these many hours because I have schoolwork to do or I need to study. They actually cut down the amount of hours they are working to keep the good grades in school. I knew a lot of friends at high school that worked and managed their time a work just so they could do better in school. Then after school let out for the year, they would work more hours during the summer time. Unfortunately, my parents don’t even let me do that. So, for all the teenagers that are working consider yourselves lucky.
Can you imagine some teenagers that you knew or not rob a store or a bank because their parents say that they can't get a job? Can you imagine teenagers doing something that drastic just to get that paper? Why let our children and or friends go that far just to relay a message to the parents? What is up with these parents not letting their teenagers work? What happened to "letting them go off to make their own mistakes and then letting them learn by it"? And if the parents does decide to let their teenagers work, what a big, awful, terrible mistake you our making. I mean I do understand school now, get a degree, and then get a "career" later, but I don’t think that parents really understand that when a teenager has a job, he or she wouldn’t be asking for money all the time. The parents wouldn’t be dishing out so much money every week. Honestly, I don’t get it? The parents are always telling their kids to stop complaining, but parents complain when their teenagers are asking for money. Why not let them work? Think of all the reasons why teenagers without a job would go to their parents for money. Wouldn’t you think that if he or she did work he or she wouldn’t be asking for money and that means more money that his or her parents can splurge on themselves or can go towards bills. If parents would let their teenagers work, I believe that he or she would become independent and not depending on his or her parents to get what they need. Having a job at an early age would help the child to mature enough, so that when it comes time for them to get into the "real" world they wouldn’t be having so much trouble with financing and et cetera. Also, they wouldn't be resorting to crime.
For example, I am a seventeen-year-old college student and I haven’t had a job in all my life. My parents believe that if I keep my head in school and the school books, I would get a career that is better paying and worth the time rather then these positions at McDonalds, Burger King, and et cetera. They also believe that school comes first and that a job can come later. For this issue, I had interviewed my fifteen-year-old brother and got his perspective on his parents deciding that he needs to worry about school and not a job:
Me: How old are you?
Gregg: Fifteen years old.
Me: Do you go to school? Do you work?
Gregg: Yes, I go to school and no I don't work.
Me: If so, where and how much do you get paid? If not, why don't you work?
Gregg: My parents want me to have a career not a position.
Me: Do you believe that your parents don't want you to work? Why?
Gregg: I believe that my parents don't want me to work because they say I need a career not a job.
Me: Do you believe that your parents think that since you go to school, you don't have the time for work?
Gregg: My parents believe that education is the most important and it comes first. I do not have time for work.
Me: What do you think is actually the reasons for your parents not letting you work? Do you think that the reason is because they want you to keep your head into school or because they think you are not ready?
Gregg: I believe that my parents think that I can't follow directions so, if I can't follow directions I can't get a job.
Me: Do you want to work and if so, what is your reason for working?
Gregg: Yes, I want to work because I am so tried of asking my parents for money. I would what to go out somewhere and would not have to ask my parents for nothing. Besides, asking for money from my parents is like filling out a 10-paged essay on why I need the money or what are you going to use it for? It is just too many questions just to ask for money.
This interview with my brother Gregg has just clarified what I was just writing about. It is too much of a hassle to ask for money for going out with some friends or for school stuff. On the part were my brother told me that "my parents think that I can't follow directions so, if I can't follow directions I can't get a job" I believe that a job could help my brother follow directions. I believe if he doesn’t want to get fired or doesn’t want to prove our parents right, he would follow directions. Besides, does parents know that when your child becomes a teenager, he or she can multitask. We can figure out a way to balance out school full-time and work part-time.
I can’t believe this…
Here is an interesting blog post on how this eighteen-year-old boy’s father wishes that there were anti-finery laws for teenagers. I think this is hilarious! Here is the link http://blogs.law.harvard.edu/philg/2006/10/01/anti-finery-laws-for-teenagers/. To me, it sounds like this parent is jealous of his son for driving this brand-new Mercedes. I think because of the father’s jealousy he wanted teenagers to have this anti-finery law because he feels that he doesn’t match up with his son. I guess he expected for him to be up there in the economic stature then his son. I guess he feels as though teenagers shouldn’t be allowed to have jobs like that because if so, it makes everybody else that had worked longer and harder to get that kind of money look bad. I would be pretty mad if my son or daughter was making a whole lot of money then I was in my lifetime. But look at the bright side, at least that child is not asking you for money. It makes life so much easier. Here is another blog post on how Sarah’s parents let her work and the benefits of having a job. Here is the link http://zalena.livejournal.com/443266.html. This blog talks about something at first, but talks about when her mother was out of work when she was in college and helping her mother out with the bills. I think parents believe that if their teenager has a job he or she would be selfish and wouldn’t help out. With me personally, I wouldn’t even dream of doing that. If my parents were in need of money or anything else, I would do my best into helping them in anyway I could. In another blog post http://allaboutlavender.blogspot.com/2006/07/teenagers-each-work-in-progress.html, this talks about how this company called All About Lavender likes the idea of hiring teenagers to gather lavender from their fields.
"As a community member we're committed to this hiring of teenagers even
though it makes little sense in terms of business. We consider it a long term
investment in our community and in each of the kids we're able to employ.
These work opportunities help kids build confidence and self esteem. They learn
responsibility and work ethic. They learn how to work together with others
outside of their usual circle of friends. They learn that a little hard work won't
kill them - even though there are a few teenagers who might like to argue that
point."
I agree with this person (it doesn’t give a name on who is the owner or who is saying this). Giving teenagers a chance to work would give them an experience that he or she wouldn’t forget. Because of that first job, it could help him or her look at the world in a different view and learn responsibility and how to coexist with others. I’m am glad that someone is looking at this from my point of view. I been trying for years to convince my parents to let me work because it can teach me responsibility and loyalty, but my parents keep on assisting that I need to concentrate on school.
Who cares what they think…?
In this next article that I actually got from CNN talks about basically what a parents would think about before letting their teenagers go into the work world. Here is the link http://web.jjay.cuny.edu/~awinson/teens-working.htm. I understand that parents only see the negative things that could happen if the child gets a job, such as the poor grades and the higher alcohol consumption. But I feel as though teenagers should be allowed to work and also balance out the load of school. I mean yea some teenagers work and don’t have time for schoolwork, but don’t label all teenagers to what others don’t do. Just because some lack off on schoolwork because of their job doesn’t mean that all teenagers would do the same. There are some teenagers out in the world that actually are mature enough to say to their boss that I can’t work these many hours because I have schoolwork to do or I need to study. They actually cut down the amount of hours they are working to keep the good grades in school. I knew a lot of friends at high school that worked and managed their time a work just so they could do better in school. Then after school let out for the year, they would work more hours during the summer time. Unfortunately, my parents don’t even let me do that. So, for all the teenagers that are working consider yourselves lucky.
posted by Camille at 3:17 PM
1 Comments:
C,
I agree with Monica that your topic is specific here. And you include a number of links -- from both sides of the issue. That's good.
Overall, though, the blogpost lacks a certain coherence that would make it convincing. One place to start is the INTRO. Work on taking the TIME you need to properly introduce us to the topic -- give us background and context. Go slow.
Second, each section of the post could use more transition to the next.
Finally, the grammer and mechanics of the blog are sloppy. There are too many errors here for you to effectively make your point. I suggest you get someone else to read your research paper before you submit it. The Writing Center is always a good start.
All right. See me with questions.
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